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Logically, this is Jewelsky's story.

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Post by Jewelsky Wed Jul 05, 2017 5:48 pm

Hey so I had a fursona story here but it sucked and I wanted to change it so I did
On Wattpad I've been posting my revised fursona story for around 2 years (lol a prologue and 6 chapters in 2 years git gud jules) under the name Logically, because I have nothing better to call it and should probably find a better title, but yeah this is my fursona story now please ignore absolutely everything in my past story because none of it will be returning at all
The chapters there have titles too, if you guys want me to put those here I'll add them but I just don't like them that much lol
If there's anything wrong with this, even the tiniest bit, please let me know; I want to make it as good as possible

Prologue:
Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:

If you have any questions or anything too of course you can ask them! as for when I'm going to update this, I never have any idea lol but I will post it here as soon as I do


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Post by Jewelsky Wed Jul 05, 2017 5:48 pm

just in case I need this post in the future
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Post by Jewelsky Wed Jul 05, 2017 5:48 pm

and this one
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Post by Jewelsky Wed Jul 05, 2017 5:49 pm

and juuuuuust to be safe I'll add this one
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Post by Jewelsky Wed Jul 05, 2017 5:49 pm

and ok now everyone is free to post
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Post by Moonflame Sun Jul 09, 2017 12:54 am

i haven't read much atm, but i got a sense of your writing style almost right away! (very beautiful describing words by the way!) if i were to put my 2 cents in, i would recommend maybe taking a few out? (this happened to me this year) too many describing words and trying to sound uber sophisticated can sometimes create paraphrasing and language issues, resulting in some sentences not making sense due to the sake of word choice. don't be afraid to simple some of the sentences down ! (of course this is just my humble opinion, and if this is a style choice, proceed !! it's lovely anyways.)
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Post by Jewelsky Sun Jul 09, 2017 7:18 am

yeeeeah I know it might be a bit too verbose, I was planning on going back and revising this since I haven't touched most of these chapters in around 2 years but first I wanted to get posting them out of the way or I'd never have the motivation to edit them in the first place lol
Thanks for your input, though ^o^
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