Could you guys give me your opinion on something please? :)

Hellooo fellow kitties! Glim here! ^w^
I was bored today and I started writing a Christmas story about my pets, Rascal and Dasher. If I actually continue writing it, It'll probably end up being super long and I want it finished by Christmas. So yeah, that's why it's a Christmas story, even though it's only October 1st at the moment xD
While I was writing the beginning of this story, I wasn't really paying attention. My mind was in a different place, y'know? So it turned out kinda bad. I'm going to edit it when I have the time, and I wanted to ask you guys for help...because I'm not the best at editing, heh heh.
I'm going to post the beginning belowww, and please tell me what you think, and how I could make it better.

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I hope you liked it! xD In case you didn't know, Dasher is my pet--she's a Seal Point Siamese cat, just like my fursona. Rascal, however, is Vineh's pet--he's a black and white Papillon.
And also, if you didn't know, Rascal is basically always "a bad boy" and is put in his cage, so that's why he's so excited about being "good" xD

Thanks for readinggg!
~Glimmer <3

Me likey

This is fantastic so far~! :D It looks really cool, Glim. ;3;

Thanks! I was hoping you'd like it, I was a bit worried.
you guys actually picked the first option xDD

I love it. :3

Thanks, Shadow! I think I'll continue it, since you guys like it ;w;
I'll probably write a bunch and post the whole thing some time in December.

This is super cute! KEEP WRITING

You're welcome Glimmer! :3

Mrs. Dipper Pines wrote:We picked the first option because we have swag

Yes, yes we do. xD

Wow, that's great xD It fits their personalities sooooo much. Dasher may need a cat psychologist though 0_o

It is very very good! <3

I saw a few grammatical errors (only a few! good job ^.^), so if you ever want me to edit the whole thing for you just lemme know

Overall though, I loved it c:

I didn't see any errors. xD Being a grammar Nazi, I prolly would've pointed any out right away. o3o

@Silvy--If you found any errors, feel free to point them out and I'll edit it right away x3 Thanks for letting me know, I really appreciate it! when I posted this I didn't go over it woops

I'm still writing this, and I think it's turning out pretty good :D At first I wasn't really sure if I should continue or not; usually, when I start writing something, I get pretty frustrated and tell myself that it's horrible, and I should stop. :\ Thanks for supporting me guys, it means a lot <3

I do that with stories all the time, Glim. xD I've deleted at least five
Anyway, you're welcome~ <3

Heyoooo :D random post attack
so, this story was finished and was given to my family as a Christmas gift. :3 I worked really hard on it, and I think it turned out good! It's on a hard drive that I don't have at the moment, though xD Whenever I get a computer (who knows when that'll be), I'll be sure to post it.
The reason I thought of this was because I'm already starting my second one xD WOOPS
probably way too early for that, but I ended up freaking out last year cause my computer broke in December and I lost my story, so I took the hard drive out and my mom got some guy to send the story to Vine's computer (which is no longer existent either...cough), and I had to rush the ending of it on Christmas Eve and print it out at my grandparents' with hardly any time. I wanted to start just a bit earlier cause you don't know when something will randomly decide to explode (yes, former laptop, I'm looking at you) and plus, I want it to be longer than last year's and I'll also need some time to plan it out (I just did the ending for this one as I went along.)
so, yeah...that's what happened to this

Gosh this thread is ancient xD I can't wait to read your finished story! And the next one you write, too <3